opinion of my writing?

I edited it according to everyone's opinions. AND MY STORY HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH VAMPIRES. That was the one opinion that pissed me off . =) Enjoy. h and also, if some parts of the story( like the Vessel and hi being dead yet still being there) don't make sense, uhm, they're not supposed to. I made my first chapter like that on purpose. Okay, now enjoy.

It was ironic: Ending a Vessel’s life at the same place that mine had too ended.Or had it already been predetermined that today would just happen to be the day before my own death a year ago. The two consequentials collided, making me feel nostalgic, reminiscent. The weather outside the window was exactly the same as it had been that day: Rainy and foggy. Destiny was reveling; the circumstances were too non-discreet to be pure coincidence.
The interior of the room was the one thing that was original, altered from how it had been in the memory of a foregone life. Before, the place had been relatively bare, a small TV, a couch, and an armchair being the only decorative center pieces. Now though, the walls had been repainted, overlapping the decaying murky brown with plain white. A shag rug was in the center of the room accompanied with a plasma screen TV. Facing, three leather arm chairs, three in prime condition unlike the one that had been there before. Paintings, vases, round glass tables, there were too many exquisite, in comparison, changes to account for, but these specific details drew my eye. Part of me had expected for this place to stay in a permanent stasis of time, the one place of the world that would always remain constant while everything around it changed. Instead, it had continued on, I was an anneeded number to its equation.

Having this callous fact shoved in front of my face was painful reality, a cold slap in the face.
I closed the apartment's door behind me, snuffing out the crack of light from the hallway that had escaped into the room, and locked it. It was a full moon today, but the clouds were eclipsing its pale rays. The room was dark. Even though I was part of the Darkness, it didn’t grant me sight-all-seeing: I still needed a light. From the obscurity of my vision, I could see a lamp in the corner of the room precariously placed on top of a stack of boxes. My eyes were beginning to adjust, but I still walked slowly over to it, ensuring that I didn’t trip over anything. I pulled the switch and its shaded, yellow light illuminated the room, dampening its bleakness. I turned around and set off to settle myself into one of the armchairs, to wait. I stretched my legs and lazily rested my arms onto its rests.
There was no doubt in me: I knew what I was doing was sickening, both an insult to hers and my own memory. I found that for the most part, I really didn’t care. A feeling that was against my own will. Stoicism had become my forte. A preresequite to where I was now: Hell. Almost literally.

My ears pricked up as the sound of jangling keys issued close from beyond the other side of the door, stationary, the sound didn’t fade away. This wasn’t a passerby; my break was being cut short. I jumped up from the comforts of the armchair and rushed off to the lamp, turning it off, darkness engulfing the room again. My heart rate immediately picked up in double-time, gushing excitement into my veins. This was pleasing ; I hadn’t felt a surge of emotion since the last time I had to do…this. The effect never got old but instead ripened with each inevitable occurance.
The lock clicked and the doorknob turned as the door was swiftly opened. The light of the hallway bedazzled the Vessel: A man wearing a brown suit , his black hair tied in a ponytail from the back of his head. He yawned widely, closed the door, and flicked on the light switch beside him simultaneously. My eyes squinted as the overhead light turned on. The lamp’s light had been dim, but this was exuberant, almost unbearable. It didn’t bother him in the slightest. Yawning again, he slugged his way over to the coat rack by the lamp in the corner I was in, and pulled off his jacket, hanging it onto one of the hooks.
He was tangibly close. Every minute blemish and speck of unshaven hair populating his face, every deep bag burrowed underneath his bloodshot eyes were perfectly visible. My body was going haywire, reacting as it usually did whenever a Vessel was nearby. But since this one was so close, everything became proportionately magnified.

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